Another Script Option

So I thought of another script option, didn't change a whole lot. Mostly some camera transitions and added a bit more dialog. I story boarded according to this one.

FADE IN:

EXT. PARK- SUNRISE

Open with full shot of park setting. Scattered couples in background leisurely walking or sitting. Butterfly's flying over a thorn bush. One COUPLE walks in foreground and continues down a path.

TRUCK IN:

on Couple as they walk towards a bench. A Morning Glory flower with-in a thorn bush comes into middle of frame, as Couple sits down.

CUT:

EXT. PARK- SUNRISE

MEDIUM SHOT:

Couple sitting on bench, women turns to man

WOMEN to MAN: " oh look at the pretty butterflies"

CUT:

EXT. PARK-THORN BUSH-SUNRISE

TRUCK IN:

Thorn Bush where butterflies are fluttering around bush and single flower.

Hear sounds of aerial battles as camera goes closer.

CUT:

EXT. PARK-THORN BUSH-SUNRISE

Full shot of 2 sides of butterflies fighting each other over main flower.

CUT:

CLOSE UP BUTTERFLY 1: "The nectar will be ours!"

Butterly 1 drops a bomb-like thing as Camera Zooms out.

CUT:

CLOSE UP BUTTERFLY 2: " Never! the flower belongs to us!"

CUT:

BUTTERFLY 3: " I got a target"

maybe show some sort of targeting system as he blows up something

CUT:

BUTTERFLY 4 chasing down BUTTERFLY 5 as they go through thorn branches etc....

CUT:

Perspective shot of Butterfly 1 shooting Butter fly 2. Butterfly 2 falls.

CUT:

EXT. PARK-COUPLE

Women looks confused. Maybe show her leaning in to get a better view.

CUT:

Wide shot of thorn bush and battle. You see a trail of smoke fall down and Flower teeter a little bit.

CUT:

EXT. PARK-THORN BUSH

Quick zoom to Butterfly 2 on fire falling

BUTTERFLY 2: "Mayday! Mayday! Tango alpha zulu niner! I'm going down I'm going down!"

CUT:

EXT. PARK-THORN BUSH-HANGER

Wide shot of Butterfly "army" in hanger like area. See different Butterflies in various military like positions. maybe a pan?

STOP PAN at GENERAL BUTTERFLY 1.

General Butterfly 1 walks over and grabs a "phone" off another Butterflies back

GENERAL BUTTERFLY 1: Lets get some reinforcements down there now!"

Camera TRUCK OUT:

See jet-like Butterflies emerging from cocoons and swooping out of camera.

CUT:

Wide--shot of jet-like Butterflies flying into battle.

CUT:

EXT. PARK. THORN BUSH. HANGER 2

Close up of BUTTERFLY GENERAL 2 (other "team") looking angery

BUTTERFLY GENERAL 2:" Give 'em all we got!"

CUT:

See a bunch of butterflies take off towards flower

CUT:

EXT. PARK. THORNBUSH. HANGER 1

Close up of Butterfly General 1

CUT:

EXT. PARK. THORNBUSH. HANGER 2

Close up of Butterfly General 2.

CUT.

EXT. PARK

Wide shot of thorn bush area and small smoke puffs everywhere and faint booms.

CUT:

Couple gets up from bench and walks towards background

WOMAN: " it smells like smoke over there"

CUT:

EXT. PARK. THORN BUSH

low PAN of "battle ground" showing butterfly parts and tools and stuff on fire.

CUT:

Close up of one lone butterfly reaching up.

CUT:

Close up of flower(with a bunch of "god rays" etc ) then you see a shadow or outline of a big caterpillar before it takes a big bite.

CUT

FADE OUT.

END.